I read "Commodity Futures Trading Commission discloses investigation of crude oil contracts," an article Dan wrote May 30, 2008 for the AP.
The 83 character headline is well under the 94 character maximum, and is pretty straightforward at telling you what you're going to get with this story. The lead comes as no surprise after the headline, telling you the who (Federal investigators), what (investigating oil markets), when (for the last six months), where (the U.S.), and why (price manipulation). How they are conducting the investigation is kept secret, so that is why that part of the six essential elements of the lead is left out. Overall the lead is good and properly represents the body of the story.
After reading through the article the first time, there is one thing that catches my eye before I even start the breakdown of each paragraph. In the last graph, "Speculation has been cited as one on many factors contributing to surging petroleum prices," seems to have a little typo. I believe the word on is supposed to be of.
The third graph has six numbers in it. It's a bit much for me to handle, but it is the nature of business reporting I suppose.
Most of the quotes in this story are partials and it seems kind of quote heavy at some points. I'm not sure if I'm a big fan of the use of so many partial quotes. It feels kind of boring and doesn't feel like I'm being told a story as much. The two graphs after Simons is introduced is an example where it seems like some of the quotes could have been broken up with more body or even removed. The phrase "will have a chilling effect" could have been taken out of quotation marks and just been attributed to Simons.
Overall, obviously I think the story is pretty good. If it's good enough for the AP, it's good enough for me. I would have included a few more direct sources, it seems like there are some that are quoted from statements and press releases.
Tuesday, March 9, 2010
Tuesday, March 2, 2010
Broadcast script
Good morning. This is David Scott, bringing you today's news in just 60 seconds.
An 8.8 magnitude earthquake decimated Chile Saturday, leaving hundreds of thousands homeless. More than 700 have been confirmed dead, with that number expected to climb as rescuers continue to search for survivors.
A different kind of shake-up is taking place in the music world, as rapper Lil Wayne will begin serving his one year jail term for felony gun charges immediately following his sentencing today. The sentencing had to be delayed three weeks so Wayne could get his diamond-studded braces removed.
Shifting from the king of rap to the king of hoops, Michael Jordan has reached an agreement to buy the Charlotte Bobcats, team officials announced yesterday. Sources estimate the purchase to be somewhere between $240 and $260 million.
Another icon was in the news yesterday as Jay Leno was back in his old role on the Tonight Show. Last night's guests included actor Jamie Foxx, Olympic gold medalist Lindsey Vonn, and country star Brad Paisley.
From David Scott, THAT is what's going on in the world today.
An 8.8 magnitude earthquake decimated Chile Saturday, leaving hundreds of thousands homeless. More than 700 have been confirmed dead, with that number expected to climb as rescuers continue to search for survivors.
A different kind of shake-up is taking place in the music world, as rapper Lil Wayne will begin serving his one year jail term for felony gun charges immediately following his sentencing today. The sentencing had to be delayed three weeks so Wayne could get his diamond-studded braces removed.
Shifting from the king of rap to the king of hoops, Michael Jordan has reached an agreement to buy the Charlotte Bobcats, team officials announced yesterday. Sources estimate the purchase to be somewhere between $240 and $260 million.
Another icon was in the news yesterday as Jay Leno was back in his old role on the Tonight Show. Last night's guests included actor Jamie Foxx, Olympic gold medalist Lindsey Vonn, and country star Brad Paisley.
From David Scott, THAT is what's going on in the world today.
Multimedia Analysis
This story is about condom distribution at the Olympic games. I chose this example because the photo accompanying the story is simple, but effective because it cleverly mimics the Olympic logo. The color of the condoms, not to mention the raciness just for showing condoms, stick out in the layout of the story, visually directing you into the lead of the story.
Here is a story about the effects of the tsunami that followed the earthquake Saturday in Chile. Fox News really likes using slide shows with their stories, as seen in their coverage of Haiti, and this story has a slide show with some powerful images to emphasize the devastation. Fox News seems to enjoy eliciting emotional responses from their audience, and this story is no exception to that agenda.
Even a simple recap of an NBA game can succesfully incorporate multimedia. It is important to tell stories with sports through visual mediums, especially incorporating highlights of the most important points. This is also good because as you are moving through the story, the video is playing and gives you the audio component, even if you aren't watching it.
Here is a story about the effects of the tsunami that followed the earthquake Saturday in Chile. Fox News really likes using slide shows with their stories, as seen in their coverage of Haiti, and this story has a slide show with some powerful images to emphasize the devastation. Fox News seems to enjoy eliciting emotional responses from their audience, and this story is no exception to that agenda.
Even a simple recap of an NBA game can succesfully incorporate multimedia. It is important to tell stories with sports through visual mediums, especially incorporating highlights of the most important points. This is also good because as you are moving through the story, the video is playing and gives you the audio component, even if you aren't watching it.
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